Friday, January 29, 2010

Friday's 55

He stole my heart like a thief in the night
I was open and couldn’t put up a fight

Trust overcame
Love has been proclaimed

Happiness is guaranteed
Monogamy agreed

Communication prevents misunderstandings
Although disagreements sting

They can be worked through
Into love we can again subdue

Making up is the best
Our hearts impressed

22 comments:

Gregorio Martino said...

That was really good Star. Nothing to appologize for there.

JStar said...

:) Thanks Gregorio....I tried...

Secretia said...

That was very well done, it had the message of hundreds of words!

Secretia

Organic Meatbag said...

It is very good, dear...

Kate said...

Wow that was really good.

Kate xx

Don said...

You are good, Jstar.

And there's nothing like a thief in the night, especially when it comes to women who want to be stolen.

JStar said...

Aww thanks all...I felt like this was sooo forced...But its true to what is currently lying in my heart...Next time I will make my 55 more of a story plot and not tooo simlar to my current poetry...This was very much rushed :)

g-man said...

Please don't you EVER demean anything that you write again!
You always write from the heart, and we always feel what YOU feel.
How can writing get any better?
Excellent 55 My Dear.
This Rocks...YOU Rock!
I'm very proud that you thought enough about doing a Flash 55 to contribute today.
Thanks Baby!!
Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G-Daddy

Brian Miller said...

great 55! making up is so much fun to do...love your verse.

my 55 is up!

JStar said...

Aww thanks GMan...I struggled with that my whole life...I NEVER thought I was any good...I just wrote for my soul...Until someone read a few things and told me how good I was...Then I started sharing, hence this blog :) Yall make me feel sooo good...Yea, I have been meaning to do one for so long I just havent really been writing much lately...Glad you enjoyed...

Thanks Brian, Yep, I already posted a comment on yours :)

Reaper said...

short, smiple and very sweet...


kiss kiss

Reaper said...

short, smiple and very sweet...


kiss kiss

Mama Zen said...

Excellent 55!

Elizabeth said...

great one again.

Miss.Fortune said...

this was definitely excellent

Dulce said...

OH so you did it!
Super G MAn got this awesome 55 from you! And I am so glad you've done it SO very well... I loved that 'monogamy agreement'! :)

Great 55- my dear friend!
have a loving and sweeter weekend!
;) xox

Roxy said...

Very meaningful and thoughtful 55!

Realliveman said...

Cool 55!

Peter Stone said...

That is really awesome, a fantastic message conveyed in just 55 words! Great job :)

My 55 is HERE

The Write Girl said...

I really like your Flash 55. It's quite amazing and your words are always heartfelt.

Kate said...

I really liked this one.

Kate xx
http://secretofficeconfessions.blogspot.com

JStar said...

:) Thanks Reaper…The words were limited so I had no choice but to express what I wanted to in few words…

Thanks Mam Zen, thanks for checking me out…

Youre the best Elizabeth!

Aww thanks Miss Daja

Thanks Dulce! I tried, not as good as I wanted it to be…I need to work on dialogue…Yea, isn’t monogamy the best…

Thanks for stopping by Roxy!

Thanks Realliveman!

Thanks Peter for checkin me out, I will return the favor

That’s an honor coming from you Write Girl!