Thursday, May 27, 2010

Revised Character Sketch

Hey, go back and re-read my character sketch.  I edited it, so tell me if it reads better????

3 comments:

sheri... said...

good morning, jennifer :) i reread your newest version but honestly, i still had such a vile taste in my mouth for what this poor girl had become that i didn't notice any changes you had made to the story! it is still raw, brutal and dehumanizing...in other words, your work is perfect!

JStar said...

:) Thanks Sherri....I took out half of the "She"'s and "her"'s but yea its the same general content...Stay tuned...There is much more hurt, pain and drama to come...

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